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Company’s top level authorities should get their Employees in decision-making. Discuss this view and give your opinion.

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In
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ompany to sort out people who are good logical thinkers. Which is one of the most important soft skill nowadays and they can help the company in future decisions. By and large,
although
 most important issues related to security and privacy most be deal between managers and CEO's as they can better handle it. But when taking steps about the welfare or improvement of a company, working
staff
 must be included. To sum up, there are myriads of reasons which show the importance of
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