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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:

#work #company #six #months #head #office #country #manager
Dear John, My name is Jazzy and I am working in the IT department in
wood-bridge
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 Toronto. I am writing to request you if you can allow me to work in our head office for
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 six months in the United States. Actually, my sister just had a new baby and I need to take care of her child for
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 few months in the USA.
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, I can spend some time with her because she is living alone. Fortunately, Our head office is in California and I have checked the address which shows very close to my sister's home.
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, I could manage my job responsibilities on phone here and I will attend our
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 two upcoming meetings which are always through video conference.
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, I can get experience and I will be able to handle more duties here after working in the head office. I assure you if you will allow me, the work will not be interrupted and I will be available through phone calls during my regular work hours. I would really appreciate
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 you will help me to arrange
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. I look forward to your positive response. Yours faithfully, Jazzy
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional advancement
  • cross-cultural collaboration
  • headquarters/ head office
  • global perspective
  • remote work
  • temporary assignment
  • team dynamics
  • networking opportunities
  • cultural immersion
  • succession planning
  • collaborative tools
  • time zone coordination
  • corporate hierarchy
  • relocation logistics
  • work-life balance
  • multinational environment
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