rising university fees and scare employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximize chance of employment. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Employment and education are often considered as two major factors or any country to not only sustain but to grow, develop and eventually prosper. These two factors are more often than not spoken in the same breath. It is true that
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but is education, more
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, a college degree only important for us to get a job? Throughout
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history (a subject that itself has fingers raised towards), there lie
evidences
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of philosophers and artist taking the
world
forward towards progress and towards what we know as present. Agreed, that
this
has been a long term process and hasn't
happend
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happened
happen
over a day but without
philosphers
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philosophers
and artists who stood out of the society, often as outcasts, and actually gave birth to what we know as modern science and maths, subjects that can be deemed as practical, we still would have not known the moment of earth or a simple formula of
Pythagorus
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Pythagoras
. In short,
Philisophers
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Philosophers
and artists are the creators of tomorrow,
one
might not understand what they are
upto
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up to
right now, but once you look back to all the
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mankind has come through, the start to look more and more important. Unemployment comes up as
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biggest concern for all the major and minor economies in the
world
alike.
One
needs to strive harder than ever to get that
one
job that will bring them stability and help them feed their families. Arts and Philosophy,
however
fancy and important these prospects may seem, they fail to deliver on the very basic requirement, filled stomachs. Practical subjects help get you the skill set to become an important cog in the economy which keeps it alive. A family of filled stomachs and purchasing power in hands which
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leads
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equirement of more utilities which
leds
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leads
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to more employment which creates more jobs and the
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lives to see another day. On
one
hand
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are the practical degree holders, keeping the ship afloat, the entire
world
alive and in order and
on the other hand
are artists, providing direction to
this
ship, giving up on the latter will make the
world
directionless and without any way forward every individual in the ship will eventually suffocate.
Hence
even though practical
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courses
sources
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one
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artists and
philosphers
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philosophers
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