You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

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Dear Smith, I am writing to inquire about some electronic gadgets from your store. I need to buy a laptop and I was looking online on your website that you really have good deals going on. I want to buy a 13' inch mac-book air and I want to know if you have

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at the moment or you have to order that. If you do order, how long it will take as I will be required

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month for some important assignments.

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, I would like to know the exact price including tax. If you will give me a good deal, I am thinking of buying apple air-pods as well.

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, can I come for pick-up or you will deliver to my door? Please let me know if I choose to pick up, how long you will be holding my order. I would really appreciate it. I look forward to your quick response. Yours sincerely, Jazzy

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 8.0

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7 paragraphs

157 words

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