Some TV programs and violent video games are harmful for children.How harmful are they? What can be done to solve these problems?

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There are extreme digital and tv networks that are detrimental to the young. These programs could
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irreversible damages or even fatal consequences.
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children
are affected by violence portrayed on TV channels and
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technological
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game games
and solutions to the problem.
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, the unfiltered viewing
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could have children trying to imitate
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stunts and violence.
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imitation of events could be extreme in nature as might cause disability or even lead to death.
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, shows that depict
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jumping
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a building and surviving the jump is a scene
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familiar to adults.
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, children on the
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view the scene of jumping out and would decide to
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enact
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a similar act. There have been cases of fatalities reported because children had decided to imitate the scene. To avoid children from
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acts, parents could supervise the
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that children view. Guardians could
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restrict
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by using child-lock applications that require a password for
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on the television.
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, the violent digital games that youths play could have a detrimental effect on their mental health. The
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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