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“Nowadays children are undisciplined because their parents are busy with their career.” To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What could parents do to build a sense of discipline among children?

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 bar chart reveals, the consumption of calories of people, where other depicts the proportion of obese people in 2013 in the same countries. Overall, it can be seen that the USA, Italy and the UK consumed more calories than India and the Democratic Republic of Congo.
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econd graph, people of the USA were at the peak in obesity. It was 70, which was drastically higher than the others. On the flip side, Indian and Congolese were the least affected with
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