In many countries more and more young people are leaving schools but unable to find a job. What problem do you think youth unemployment causes for individuals and for societies? What measures should be taken to reduce level of unemployment for youngsters.

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The education system in most of the countries isn't functioning the way as it should be and
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many youngsters who pass out of school are unable to secure a job in the market. The employment rate of a particular country gradually decreases when people do not have the required skills to get hired in companies. In
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mployement rate. In a nation where the youth are jobless
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it turns out to be a difficult situation as young people are the ones who will replace elderly people when they retire. If students don't have proper practical skills how can they become eligible for jobs
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, in India, schools usually focus
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theoretical study rather than practical,
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, after passing from colleges, these students do not have enough knowledge to work in a firm. Companies need to innovate for surviving and when they do not find the right talent they move out of that country in search for bright students.
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ducation system to improve and train students according to the corporate requirements in order to retain investment. The economy of a country is partially dependent on the employment rate and when
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • youth unemployment
  • potential productivity
  • economic output
  • consumer spending
  • retail and service sectors
  • prolonged unemployment
  • social unrest
  • crime rates
  • mental health problems
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • educational system flaws
  • market demands
  • outdated curricula
  • vocational training
  • internships
  • theoretical knowledge
  • practical skills
  • policy interventions
  • job creation programs
  • training workshops
  • tax incentives
  • private sector involvement
  • work-study programs
  • entrepreneurial encouragement
  • funding opportunities
  • traditional employment markets
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