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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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It has been observed annually that different languages go into extinction. Some individuals believe that
this
 development is unimportant because life will be more convenient if there are reduced native tongues globally. In my own view, I disagree with
this
 perspective because language is essential for
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reservation of cultural heritage and maintenance of
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ndividual's
identity
.
First
 and foremost, it is very expedient to give preference to
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ocal dialect in order to preserve diverse cultural inheritance and values. Language, which is unique to most communities globally, is a gateway to
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 the core values and beliefs of various ethnic groups.
Also
, it is important to note that these values are treasured and respected by the local people. These individuals derive pleasure and
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ense of
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 in passing on their beliefs to the
next
 generation.
For instance
, it is a norm in 'Yoruba' land to use special words for qualifying adults and elderly population whereas,
such
 is not recognized in the western world.
Therefore
, it is necessary to keep
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 mother's tongues.
Furthermore
, a gradual reduction in native tongue can result in loss of
identity
. Globalization together with technological advancements
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 significantly imparted the rate of migration of people from one place to another. Restricting the official language to one or two can be damaging to
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ndividual's lingua franca because people can forget their own local native tongue.
For example
, most immigrants to English countries find it difficult to teach their own children their mother's tongue thereby resulting
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 loss of
identity
. Be as it may,
such
 children will not be able to retain any useful information about their backgrounds. In conclusion, it is paramount to reduce the rate at which native tongues are disappearing so as to preserve cultural heritage, prevent loss of
identity
otherwise
 the whole world will become a boring place with no variety.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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