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Some people think the best way to stay fit is by joining a gym, while others think doing everyday activities such as walking is sufficient. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, it is
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ym for
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ealthy life.
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some people believe that daily activities more effective for physical and mental
fitness
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I will discuss both views and give my opinion
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First
 of all, most of
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eople going
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a
gym
for
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improve
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 their
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mental
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 and physical strength, mostly persons doing various exercises in
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ym by using different machines and
also
 taking help from
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ersonal trainer. The benefits to
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 a
gym
 is developing muscles and seeing a fast result
also
.
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Furthermore
, in
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every individual doing a variety of exercises which takes less
time
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esult.
For example
, mostly youngster doing exercises in a
gym
 for developing muscle and want
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early results.
Secondly
 of all, some individuals do not have
time
 to going
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ym because
of
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they do not have much
time
for
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join
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a
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fitness
centers
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.
For instance
, according to
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 times, the age group of 30 to 45 years old people want most of
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ime spend with their family.
However
 these people are staying healthy and fit by their routine activities
such
 as
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,
push ups
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, pull over and many more.
In addition
fitness
center
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 a
time consuming
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 expense and
also
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onthly budget. In my point of view, every individual has their priorities, some people want to go
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a proper place where they do various exercises and
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 want to do home exercise like yoga. According to me, daily routine activities for stay fit and healthy life is better than to go
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ym. To conclude, it varies to person and their priorities some people feel like to do exercises at
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ym and other
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 and other want to do exercise at home and spend more
time
 with their love ones.
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