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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions

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It has become very common among new
joinees
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joiners
 not fully
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grasp
 the new environment at their
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. I believe, it is because they are expected to perform from day one from their employees. and
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, Hiring people does take suffiencents steps to break the ice with old employees.
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employee
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 hired a new
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, they have
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ot of expectations from the new
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joiner
. The new guys
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 of making him/her
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familiarizing
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 their
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. Every
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 is given
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hree-month probation period, where they are expected to showcase their skills and proof their worth in the organization.
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 leads to people not mingling around their counterparts, and
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threatend
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, many human resources are not
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taking
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equired steps to make
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 friendlier
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environment
 for their new employees to socialize with their peer. So,
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 kind of behaviour might come across as cold and distant to old employees. I think the best way to resolve
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 issue is that companies should have a good induction plan for their
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 on-boarding. An interactive team welcome will enable
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etter understanding of the
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 culture and give them
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pportunity to interact with their colleagues. In my opinion, Staff welcome party would be
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 ideal situation for the companies, to meet their fellow teammates and
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, people from
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ifferent department in
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ess formal setting. It will be an ideal scenario for employees to get to know each other. These welcome parties can be
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tress reliever. To conclude, the pressure of proofing our worth in the company can be very stressful and adjusting to
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ew environment can take time. It is an organization's
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 their new hires. They need to take steps to make them comfortable, so they can bond with their colleagues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • cooperative skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • digital communication
  • non-verbal cues
  • active listening
  • education system
  • technical knowledge
  • soft skills
  • remote work
  • work environment
  • comprehensive training programs
  • workshops
  • teamwork
  • role-playing scenarios
  • open communication
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational institutions
  • curriculums
  • hybrid work models
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