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When a person spends most of his or her time working a job with little job satisfaction, their life loses meaning. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that the purpose of
life
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 fades away when workforces burn the wick both at the end without
fulfillment
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 while others think the meaning of their
life
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 depends on their outlook on
life
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 including a lot of aspects whether the drained
work
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 or not. From my perspective, I agree partly with the
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Firstly
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, it is true that two-thirds of an adult's time is
work
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 and
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 plays a great role in our well-being
life
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 and a sense of fulfilling
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 as by earning money through putting in time for jobs, we could meet almost basic needs. If they
work
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 at a daunting and unaspiring job or do the same
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work day
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 in, day out is a tedious and laborious task, they, of course, will have not enough energy for other activities. For the long-term,
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 has led to drained emotion which makes them frustrated and emptied all day.
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, everyone has a different outlook on
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. For some people, occupation is the most important thing in their
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 because they would like to be productive citizens who contribute to the community and have dignity and self-worth.
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, others think that earning money is a tool to make their
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 contented with families and friends. For
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 reason, the purpose of their
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 still exists even if they are in tiresome jobs or sweat over projects. To illustrate, parents have a sense of satisfaction when seeing their baby's smiles or their growth
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 of exhaustion due to a stagnant job. They still,
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, enjoy every moment with families and friends, whether the occupation is fulfilling or not. In conclusion, I agree that
work
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 is very important for our sense of
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 in our lives.
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, it is not one only factor because a person's state of mind contributes to it as well.

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