Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss on both sides and give your opinion.

Traditions represent our way of living, many generations carry these traditions to preserve their culture and to show the
world
what they are. These cultural traditions
also
unite people across the
world
. People belong to the same cultural backgrounds, celebrate their traditions and festivals even they are living in different countries.
This
makes them feel close to there families and community and
also
introduce their cultural traditions to the other people.
This
is the major idea behind the cultural traditions. Many people around the
world
are interested in knowing other cultures. They always pay some time and efforts to explore the different rich cultural traditions, which has actually many great advantages. Their curiosity tells the stories of different communities others and it
also
brings a lot of revenue to the particular communities and countries. Some traditions particularly attract tourists from all over the earth. People in those cultures always want to picturise there cultures in a good way to the tourists and make some money. Sometimes, they have to coverup
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ew things in their cultural traditions to attract foreigners.
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will kill the original soul of their cultures and many people afraid that their future generations will lose the original flavour of their lifestyles. On other hand, decorating the cultures and traditions is not always bad. It enhances the beauty of the traditions and attracts
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orld towards them. There are a lot of examples in
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history that one tradition from a country spread throughout the
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and became a
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heritage.
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they went into the people so strong that people from other cultures
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adopt it in their lifestyle.
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humanity
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because it bonds all humans and brings everyone under
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ame roof. To conclude,
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everyone's responsibility to preserve their own culture even they are trying to make money around it because if they lose the original flavour it is like
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ody without life, never attracts anyone.
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