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One way to reduce the problem of traffic congestion is by increasing the tax on private vehicles. Do you think this is a feasible solution?

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There is no doubt that, presently,
traffic
 congestion is so severe. It is sometimes thought that rising private vehicle tax is the best
method
 to control the issue. I strongly believe
this
method
 cannot be successful,
instead
,
this
 brings huge repercussions. The primary reason why I disagree
this
 is that by increasing taxes it would only prevent the poor people from buying personalised vehicles.
This
 is because the under privilege group is very small,
therefore
,
this
 increase does not make any difference in the number of cars on the road.
For instance
, previously, in
the
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 strategies, but the result was unsatisfactory
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 since
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 extra charges can easily afford by the rich. Alternatively, poor customers
,
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 started to purchase used cars, which again created more
traffic
 issues than before. There is no doubt that, presently,
traffic
 congestion is so severe. It is sometimes thought that rising private vehicle tax is the best
method
 to control the issue. I strongly believe
this
method
 cannot be successful,
instead
,
this
 brings huge repercussions. The primary reason why I disagree
this
 is that by increasing taxes it would only prevent the poor people from buying personalised vehicles.
This
 is because the under privilege group is very small,
therefore
,
this
 increase does not make any difference in the number of cars on the road.
For instance
, previously, in
the
Change the article
a
show examples
 certain part of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
India, they adopted
this
Change the determiner
these
show examples
 strategies, but the result was unsatisfactory
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 since
they
Correct the word
the
show examples
 extra charges can easily afford by the rich. Alternatively, poor customers
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 started to purchase used cars, which again created more
traffic
 issues than before.
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