Over the last few decades, the media has promoted the image of young thin women as being ideal. What problems has this caused? What solutions can you suggest to this issue?

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image problems have been endemic for women for too long a time.
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,
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will illustrate some of the impacts of
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situation and propose some solutions to unravel them.
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with, these days too many girls and women have a warped and distorted view on how they look, which is fed into by the advertising industry, the media, the fashion world. Studies have shown that only 2% of females find themselves beautiful, while most
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omen express dissatisfactions and concern with their
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and strive for a thinner
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. Very often young girls
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regularly
skip meals or even starve themselves to be thin. At the same time, older women spend a lot of money to anti-age cosmetic and rejuvenating treatments. Another research has shown, with that money is possible to eradicate extreme poverty and hunger. In both cases,
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, the problem remains unsolved because perfect is untouchable.
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, females often come into mentally and physically ailments in the wake of the quest for perfection. From my point of view, there are some solutions that can mitigate the negative impact on women and girls.
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of all, we need more role models "
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" and of a certain age among celebrities to seek to. We need to change our perspective on
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and put our priority not on thinness and
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but on image, energy, health.
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, parents have a responsibility to create a
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environment for their
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daughters
; to teach them, that there is no one perfect
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, true beauty and self-confidence come from within. Parents should
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that being thin does not mean being pretty, and health is more important than dress size. It would be really helpful if mothers set
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a young age, it is going to be very hard for them to make a pattern of their
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, the perfect
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, which has been promoted by media, is often unattainable.
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, dissatisfactions with
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have become a big problem among female. As I see it, to unravel
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issue adults should create a
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-positive environment in society. Media, in its turn,
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demonstrate different good social role models for girls.
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