Some people think that social media platforms are useful for business and making new friends, while others think that such websites are harmful. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of social media.

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advancing
technology, some people believe that
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nternet is benefits for
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conomy and making new friends, meanwhile, others think that there are some drawbacks with it. In
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essay, I will consider both sides of the argument and give my own point of view. On one hand, social media can develop the countries'
economy
.
For example
, there are many corporations through
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nternet to contact their business partner which make them achieve the goal.
Therefore
,
this
can build up the
economy
.
Moreover
, it is really common to make friends via social media or some platforms which make us making friends with each other become more easily.
For instance
, many people use
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to reach some
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for making new friends.
This
is a convenient and easy way
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someone who
want
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to know some new friends.
On the other hand
, there are
also
some disadvantages,
such
as people become addictiveness. There is no doubt people become use
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omputer as a habit, and some of them even forget to eat or sleep. The evidence is some people play games on the
internet
and become less to have other activities.
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them distract from
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healthy relationships with others. In additions, those people browsing the websites for a long period is harmful
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their eyes. The best example is when someone
work
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for a long time
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using the
internet
, they will feel really tired and their eye
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dry.
This
is because when we pay attention to looking at the screen which
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a person become less to rest their eyes.
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,
this
also
damage our eyes. In conclusion,
although
using
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nternet is harmful to our eyes and becoming addictiveness.
However
, I strongly believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages by the development of
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conomy and more
conveninet
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convenient
to make friends.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social media outreach
  • Professional networking
  • Brand visibility
  • Customer engagement
  • Misinformation
  • Digital marketing
  • Privacy concerns
  • Online presence
  • Viral marketing
  • Cybersecurity risks
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