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People nowadays prefer to interact online (e.g. do shopping, chat with friends) rather than talking to other people face-to-face.

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Nowadays, with the
development
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 of internet and technologies, we can buy things without going to the shopping mall and
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 have various way to communicate, to "talk" to other people without waiting for weeks to receive a friend's letter or meeting them
face
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 to
face
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. To make all of these changes happened, lots of
talent
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 people, our scientists, researchers and engineers have worked so hard to create incredible technologies. Now we do everything "online"; using your smartphone to order foods, clothes or even a new car; talking to your friends from thousands
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kilometers
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 away. All of these technologies and tools made our modern
life
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 is more convenient, but
it
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also
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create
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 problems that we never had to deal with before .In my opinion, I think
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 circumstance is both
p
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ositive or negative
development
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. Lots of people would agree that now we have a
life
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's more wonderful and
colorful
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 than we had in the past -
the
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online
life
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.
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, you don't have to go to
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oreign country to see their beautiful scenery, discover their culture. Just use your computer and your gadgets, you can go, can see, and learn whatever you want to see, to learn. When you miss your relative, your family, just pick up your
phone
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, your parents are on the line. When
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you're
your'
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re
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 starving, making a
phone
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 call and
f
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the
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ood's on
it
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 way. You don't have to leave your home to make some new friends, thanks to
s
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the
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ocial network.
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, some people argue that we are losing our real emotion, real
life
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,
r
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the
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eal part of a human being. We'
re
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 sitting right
next
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 to each other, facing your
phone
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, "talking" to others via your
phone
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instead
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 of talking
face
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 to
face
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. We'
re
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 eating at home all alone,
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 of gathering our friend and find something new to eat together. We'
re
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 watching some
people'
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people's
re
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 hiking on youtube
instead
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 of climbing on the mountain all by ourselves. It seems like we forget to enjoy our
life
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. In conclusion, I think the
development
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, which
help
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 us to do
l
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ot of things online, is
p
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a
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ositive
development
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, but it can cause some issues that we have to
face
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 and deal with.

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