The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today we are living in the world of competition where everybody is trying hard to achieve some goal. While doing
this
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like your passion, physical, mental health and goal. Majority of people working hard for
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uality lifestyle and
job
satisfaction
which give them great
life
experience.
Higher
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income
allows them
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o take
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eal taste of like
for instance
they can travel around the world, buy anything and have a luxurious
life
. I somehow agree that people do consider
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igher
income
. A
job
which
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more
income
obviously make their
life
more
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happier. It
also
make
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their financial side strong and
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tandard of living.
Such
a strong financial background provide multiple opportunities
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their
life
.
This
strong background is
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ackbone of their
life
. Money is
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arrier for them for any requirement. They live
life
with the mindset like they are on the top of all above.
On the other hand
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it is often seen that a
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income
job
without
job
satisfaction
can make
life
miserable or even
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worse. People can only buy materialistic happiness with money but a
job
or carrier with
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ood amount of
job
satisfaction
and better
income
can be much enjoyable. More
income
brings more duties and responsibilities which will add more stress to their
life
. A passioned carrier gives them extra energy to handle
such
type of stress.
Hence
in my opinion only focus on
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income
is
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ad decision
on the other hand
only good
job
satisfaction
will make
life
compromising.
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is varied from person to person what to do but a proper balance between
income
and
job
satisfaction
certainly makes a difference.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • job satisfaction
  • long-term happiness
  • personal fulfillment
  • financial stability
  • passion
  • quality of life
  • work-life balance
  • career advancement
  • societal impact
  • income disparity
  • material success
  • monetary compensation
  • wealth accumulation
  • economic well-being
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