Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves

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affluent countries should help the indigent countries

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especially for the basic necessities. While some think that the local government should look into these internal matters, to provide the basic essentials to their citizens.

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both parties have some strong justification to support their ideas, I personally agree that the local government plays an important role in providing food and education which is must to the citizens.

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governments should have good relations with the wealthier countries so as to encourage

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nationals.

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dministration built a good relationship with the prosperous countries, to have

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, in order to get resources from these countries.

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, the legislature should have mutual bounding with UNO and other

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entities to provide food and related resources to these poorer countries. Resources

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as new devices and technologies which can increase the growth of crops can be traded.

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, if the interrelation is better with the developed countries, candidates can be promoted for higher education schemes by providing scholarship. Councils

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should make sure the citizens are encouraged by building up free education schools, colleges at a minimal fee. Agriculture and farming should

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animate amongst the farmers. Farmers should be laid

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from taxes, VDT, GST and other

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expenses as they work for the nations. To sum up,

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very important in having good relationships with the other countries and encouraging citizens to build their career. Many entities can be agreed for the supply of resources, which can

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sed effectively.