Some children find some school subjects difficult (for example maths or philosophy), so these subjects should be optional rather than compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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large number of children insist that difficult for
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subjects,
such
as maths and
philosophy
, ought to be not compulsory. Actually, I entirely do not support
this
point of view because it can reduce
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tandard of living and create
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unemployment among teachers. Maths and
philosophy
definitely have to be studied by children at schools since it
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their living
rate
in the future. Studying of complicated mandatory subjects builds new neuron bonds in
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rain,
thus
children can remember and learn a numerous amount of information. It develops their intelligence, and it
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a great opportunity to go to university for
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ncreasing
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ate of
education
among students.
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Education
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ommon
rate
of
education
correlates directly with
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tandard of living,
for instance
, lack of
education
increasingly contributes to falling live
rate
. Another point to consider is that maths and
philosophy
ought to be compulsory is creating
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unemployment in
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ducation area. If difficult subjects are optional,
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ajority of children will not choose them for making their studying easier.
Therefore
, a huge number of teachers can be without lessons and beсome not needed. It will lead to waste of a state budget and teachers will be fired from schools. In conclusion, I am convinced that some school difficult subjects (
for example
maths or
philosophy
) should not be optional.
That is
because, refusing to study
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compulsory subjects not only will reduce a living standard in the future for children, but it will
also
create a high
rate
of unemployment among teachers.
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