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There are people of the opinion that the employers should provide a supportive and pleasant work environment while others believe that it is better to provide the employees with facilities and incentives. What is your opinion

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A business can be successful only if it has
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reat team ready to build the business. An employer often has to make attempts to ensure that employees are comfortable with the job. Some people argue that a supportive and pleasant
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 believe employees must be given facilities and incentives. In my opinion, it is the combination of both that leads to success. Many people do a job because they know the
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 ad it becomes easy to earn
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 in that field. Providing a
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 could be of great benefits.
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, an individual will feel more connected with the company.
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 employer who makes sure that everyone in the company is treated equally will more likely to have a supporting staff.
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employees
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 better in a pleasant
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, there are even opinions that it is better to provide facilities and incentives to the employees.
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, an employer who makes sure that every employee working in night shifts is provided with cab facility is more likely to find
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effective staff.
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, most people do
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. Providing incentives could serve their purpose.
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 is less likely to be attracted to the
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 and more focused on earning
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. Overall, I believe an organization is run not by the leader but
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the team. Providing some facilities and a great
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 in are the most essential things and employee looks for. The organization ,
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both to lead a successful journey.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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