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Success is often measured in terms of how much money somebody has earned. Do you think wealth is a good measure of success? How else could we measure whether somebody is successful or not?

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Success can have different meanings. One can define it as happiness, the other one can define it as how much money you earn and another one can say that profit is your educational level. I can say that achievement is a subjective term and we cannot measure its wealth. prosperity should be a sum of various things in
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, I consider myself and the other people "successful" if
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heart can make me happy and I can have and get the things that make me happy.
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, if I am good at my job or I am good at my school works,
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 I would be happy and these things make me successful.
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, if I travel anywhere I want and at any time I want, I consider myself successful in my life because at the bottom we need achievement in order to get our wishes. Travelling is one of the most important wishes of my soul. If I go anywhere I need,
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 I reach my accomplishment definition.
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, our relationship with people is
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enefit of our lives. In conclusion,
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dvance can be measured in terms of various things in our growth and definition can be changed person to person. According to my definition, if someone is happy, healthy and get anywhere he/she wants,
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 person is successful in her/his soul.
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