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Global languages have many benefits and drawbacks, some argue they are necessary for cooperation and advancement, while others say they are harbingers of a future monoculture. Give your opinion with examples.

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 argue that learning a global
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language
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 communication.
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, learning
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 the regional languages.
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. In fact,
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 is the largest spoken
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learning
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english
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 would help to find many
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 any business in the United States.
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, learning a global
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 can help us to find new
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 in the
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, a certain amount of
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,
people
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 of getting
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This
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, Japan has made learning
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fail in speaking their native
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 in public without any errors.
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, learning a global
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 in different
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people
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practice their local languages when they are in their
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Task Response
Your essay provides a clear response to the prompt with relevant arguments both in favor of and against learning a global language. Make sure to balance the arguments and provide an equally strong conclusion summarizing your stance.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a logical organization with a clear introduction, body paragraphs presenting different viewpoints, and a conclusion. Ensure that your transition phrases between ideas are smooth for better coherence and cohesion.
Relevant Examples
Effective use of examples to support your points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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