many people believe that high schools should focus their education on mathematics and science, rather than covering a wider ranger of subjects to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since our childhood
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we always come across the proverb "
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Knowledge
is Wisdom". Today the generation is completely
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on it because everything in the Universe deals with Mathematics and Science. In
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I would like to elaborate my views on both the topics.
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, the world is empowering with the new theory based on both
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maths and science when compared to other subjects.
Universties
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Universities
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future innovative ideas for the current
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For example
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mobile
applications we come across the video game called PUBG, it is
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developed based on algebra and integration and
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other application which
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using .
Secondly
,
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scientists
scientist
today are able to predict the future ahead of 20 years from now.
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is considered as an achievement and people are more
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interested
in knowing the future. Science has become apart of human life,
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ncient period people used to say that earth is a
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area, but now citizens are planning to relocate on Mars and Moon and are willing to know the climatic conditions over there.
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technology and science.
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focus
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teaching on mathematics and science rather than
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ide range of subjects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • high schools
  • education
  • mathematics
  • science
  • wider range
  • subjects
  • foundation
  • well-rounded individuals
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • practical applications
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • communication skills
  • balance
  • ideal
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