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Band 5.5

There is a public park near where you live. You have heard that the local council wants to sell this park. Write a letter to a local newspaper. In your letter: introduce yourself describe the importance of the park say what action you will take if the council continues with its plan

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To the Editor, My name is Clara- a resident of Coquitlam- for five years. My family moved here due to its affordability, and proximity to the city. We
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 enjoy several small parks nearby as our children and their friends play. One of
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Macdonald park, on Gloria Street. It is not large, but it is well-used, clean, and safe. Recently, I have learnt that the Coquitlam Council has decided to sell
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 public amenity for development. The land has already been reasoned residential, so I assume as many dwellings as possible- perhaps even twenty apartments- can be built here. While I am not a lawyer
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 and do not know by reason
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 land could be sold, as a resident, I was neither informed nor consulted about it. All my neighbours say the same thing. We have petitioned the council, and I hope
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 letter reaches a wider public. Our website SaveMacdonaldPark.com lists a number of protest activities in which we hope our readers may join us. As too few green and tranquil places remain in
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 overdeveloped city. Save Macdonald park before
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 too late! Yours faithfully, Clara

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affiliation
  • recreational space
  • habitat
  • environmental well-being
  • community gatherings
  • tranquility
  • negative impacts
  • petition
  • collaborating
  • voice their concerns
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