The crime rate in urban areas is usually much higher than in rural areas. Why is this? What can be done to address the problem of crime?

With the turn of
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1st century, urbanisation has increased drastically. Along with
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, what has
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is the slums. these are densely populated areas within a city consisting of people
strugling
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struggling
to meet ends.
This
negative impact of urbanisation has led to
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increase
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in the number of crimes. Urban areas are often seen as the economic
power house
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of the country. Here is where the money is.
However
, it is often forgotten that these towns aren't only made of high earning individuals sitting in high rise buildings but
also
of people who work on
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round and inturn earn peanuts.
This
forms the primary reason
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increased
crime
rates.
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is the aspiration set-up of urban centres where
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tandard of living is high but not everyone can afford it.
This
also
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leads
led
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to the movement of people on to the path of
crime
. In rural areas, both
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of living and the economic gap
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comparitively
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comparatively
very low leading to
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ower
crime
rate.
This
problem is rooted in the very core of the society and
hence
a long term approach needs to be adopted along with certain quick fixes. Short term tools to curb
this
crime
rate can be setting up a more able police force and subsidizing basic needs. The more concrete long term tasks can be providing better education, creation of jobs by creating special economic zones, setting up policies to support companies and supporting start-ups. In conclusion, the gap in
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living standards and income become 2 main factors for compromised peace in the cities.
However
, with an approach focused on the development of the country by generating jobs and training youth with
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education at reasonable can help curb
this
problem
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