IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 3.5

The best way to travel is travel in a group led by a tour guide. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#travel #group #tour #guide
It is argued that
g
Add an article
a
show examples
ood way to
travel
 is
travel
Change the verb form
to travel
traveling
show examples
 in a team led by
a
Change the article
an
show examples
asistant
Correct your spelling
assistant
.I completely agree
Verify preposition usage
with
show examples
this
 argument.There are a lot of causes that going
t
Add the particle
to
show examples
ravel in a
group
First
 of all,If you go alone
f
Add an article
a
show examples
oreign country you can lose lots of time.
For example
,when you go
Verify preposition usage
to
show examples
England you know less place because
of
Verify preposition usage
apply
show examples
you don't know all of them
such
 as
h
Add an article
the
a
show examples
istorical area and museum.You must search these places
on web-site
Add a hyphen
on-web-site
show examples
 or guide books and
then
this
situtation
Correct your spelling
situation
 reduces your time to
travel
 England
Add the comma(s)
, on the other hand,
show examples
on the other hand
 you learn less area to
travel
 England
thus
 ıt is not good
activitiy
Correct your spelling
activity
 for you.
Secondly
,you lose a lot of money because travelling in a
group
 is
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
cheaper than going alone.
Group
 of
t
Add an article
the
a
show examples
eam always provides advantages as a price.
For instance
,you buy
t
Add an article
a
show examples
icket to fly
U
Correct article usage
the
show examples
nited Kingdom for you
that is
 expensive because of just one person.But ıf you take as a
group
 you pay very little price for tickets to fly
U
Correct article usage
the
show examples
.K In conclusion,there are several positive reasons that
travel
 in a
group
 If I want
g
Add the particle
to
show examples
o
Verify preposition usage
to
show examples
any country to
travel
 I choose as a
groups
Correct the article-noun agreement
group
show examples
 because of
this
Change the determiner
these
show examples
 advantages.
Submitted by hareozel on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • organization
  • knowledgeable
  • itinerary
  • local customs
  • language barrier
  • freedom
  • flexibility
  • random
  • spontaneous
What to do next:
Look at other essays: