Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reason for this Trend and what will be the possible outcome from this behaviour? Provide example for your opinion.

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the world is changing a lot as compared to the past, due to
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reason people always want something new. As per the research,
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rend of foreign trip and relocation is increased rapidly in
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ast few years.
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and provides some superior merits of it with examples.
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people prefer to live in the old location because of peace.
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, new opportunities
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human back to the same place, where they used to live
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, people are visiting more foreign countries to promote their business and enjoy with their family over there. Mainly, some human
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to another part of the world, because they can easily gain
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knowledge about
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different cultures.
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, as per the Oxford University report,
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comfort. The government must have to encourage everyone for
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However
, there are numerous merits of
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people's awareness about the world and
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motivate them to do something innovating for their nation, in order to make it more developing country in
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century. Apart from
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roperty's rate will automatically increase because of the relocation and it is very profitable for the economy. Due to
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logic, many nation's
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give extra benefits to the people, who are ready to move. To conclude,
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is increased and
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provided the profitable outcomes of it and I have fully agreed with it. Because it is beneficial for the society as well as for the country.
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