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School are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students to find a job. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#school #time #subjects #history #people #skills #students #job
The United States Justice Department on Tuesday sued
Google
 for antitrust violations, alleging that it abused its dominance in online search and advertising to stifle
competition
 and harm consumers. The lawsuit marks the government's most significant
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 to protect
competition
 since its groundbreaking case against Microsoft more than 20 years ago. It could be an opening salvo ahead of other major government antitrust actions, given ongoing investigations of major tech companies including Apple, Amazon and Facebook at both the Justice Department and the Federal Trade Commission. "
Google
 is the gateway to the internet and a search advertising behemoth," U.S. Deputy Attorney General Jeff Rosen told reporters. "But as the antitrust complaint filed today explains, it has maintained its monopoly power through exclusionary practices that are harmful to
competition
." Lawmakers and consumer advocates have long accused
Google
, whose corporate parent Alphabet Inc. has a market value just over $1 trillion, of abusing its dominance in online search and advertising to stifle
competition
 and boost its profits. Critics contend that multibillion-dollar fines and mandated changes in
Google
's practices imposed by European regulators in recent years weren't severe enough and that structural changes are needed for
Google
 to change its conduct.
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