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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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The lie chart below illustrates to us how many social networking sites people used in Canada over the years of 2014 and 2015. Overall, a majority
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people in Canada chose to use only one site to connect with others, with 36% in 2014 and a deep drop down to 28% in 2015.
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 a group of citizens of Canada who didn't own or download any social networking sites on their phones or computers, both at over 20% in 2014 and 2015. As for two sites that were owned by local people didn't change too much over the two years, 23% in 2014 and 24% in 2015 respectively. Very few people allowed themselves to use five sites at the same, which only took up 2% in 2014 and increased slightly to 4% in 2015. So did the four sites usages, for which 5% of citizens downloaded them in 2014 and its figures rose up to 8% in 2015. Compared with the numbers of four sites and five sites, more
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 could accept to have three sites at the same time, and the number increased from 12% in 2014 to 16% in 2015. To sum up, more than half of the citizens chose to own one or two sites in total.
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