Men and women employed in full-time jobs should share the responsibilities of household chores. Do you agree or disagree? Share relevant personal experiences.

The modern world, where both men and women are
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full-
time
job. There is a
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question

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arise that Doe's household responsibilities should be shared by them. As per my point of view,
house
are
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is

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made from families members so, responsibilities of
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the
a

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ome should be divided into
the
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apply

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them. To commence with, men and women have different qualities and interest.
This
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These

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qualities are divided by responsibility can be enhanced the result. The best example is that women are natural tendency to understand behaviour and
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easily

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talk on that issue.
In addition
, women are focus on cleaning than
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men
mates
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men

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.
Secondly
, if Couple divided there
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housework work

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according to abilities and
time
, there would be
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achieve
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on
time
and because of
this
, the
time
is save
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and that save
time
, can be spent with each other.
Moreover
, the
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on the
work
and habit are reduced, when they can share their idea with each other.
For Instance
, any person can understand the value of personal or
work
they do. when the person actually performs by themself.
This
experiment is very famous
for
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solve gender argument or fighting. The oxford university took
s
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urvey about when family member
exchange
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exchanges

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their responsibilities in every two week and
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the

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other
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another

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side is when they stay on there task. The result found that who exchange the
work
are more understandable than who do exchange
work
.
This
strongly indicates that new in life would be great for
every one
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and
s
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the

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ame can be
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in
house
responsibilities. To summarize, In the
house
, where both people
are
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are working

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work
full
time
. The best way to balance a
work
-
lifelife
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life life

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and
house
life, when
c
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a

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ouple are sharing their idea and divide responsibilities, are happier and perfect in life.
This
could be adapted by every
house
in the world, would be changed
l
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ifestyle of
work
.
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