Some people believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The power of media is enormous, especially in the entertainment industry. Celebrities are surrounded

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ignificant amount of

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attention

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from the mass public.

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, some would involve

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the big problems of the world,

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as International aids. An obvious effect of

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action is more attentions would

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that are in charge. Due to the fame of celebrities,

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ublic would notice the events that they involve,

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bring more attention to the problems and the

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, because the fans of those celebrities are usually enthusiastic, they would support almost every

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celebrities.

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means not only attentions from the public, but

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actual support from fans to help

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some problems for those

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. Some would wonder whether famous people would make issues less crucial, but rather, entertaining and leisure. As global aids

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usually address problems in the

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World, issues could be quite emergent and fundamental and apparently, the nature of celebrities is entertainment for the mass public, worries about the public underestimation of the significance of problems

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. Celebrities involvement could diminish the boundary between entertainments and crises. In my view, rather than to make issues less crucial, the attendance of famous people would make these events less serious.

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, entertainment and the life of celebrities are important to many people as well.

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, it is beneficial for international charities to have supports from them, as emergent global problems would be closer to people’s daily life. In conclusion,

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crises might

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as less serious, the attendance of famous people in world-wide charities could bring higher popularity of support, as well as making the

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less distance from public life, which is rather positive.