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In some countries, people waste a lot of the food that they buy in shops and restaurants. Why do you think this is? What can be done to solve this problem?

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ew countries, humankind waste
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reater amount of
food
 that they purchase in malls and
food
 courts. The main reason for
this
 issue is the
price
 that they charge for
food
 and the solution
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this
 problem is by increasing the prices in the menu and taxes. The foremost reason to throw away
food
 is
cost
 as it is affordable to purchase frequently. As the
price
 is low society shows profound interest
towards
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the
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processed
food
 and leads them to take higher quantities and unwanted dishes.
Moreover
, people fascinating towards instant
food
 whenever people feel tired to cook
food
 by themselves. As a
resullt
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result
, majority of the leftover meal gets spoiled to consume and gets wasted.
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,
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ecent survey conducted with
food
 suppliers showed that 80
percent
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 of cooked
food
 bought from shops is wasted. To tackle
this problem shop keepers
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this problem shop keeper
these problem shop keepers
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 has to thrive the
cost
 of
food
 and raise the tax money. If the value of
food
 increased men,women and children will limit to buy lesser quantities.
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,
raise
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 in
cost
 and additional taxes encourage people to prefer cooking at home rather than spending enormous money on
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estaurant's
food
.
For instance
, recently in India
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there was a high increase in
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rice of shopping malls
food
 which restricted the majority of people to take limited quantities to avoid the wastage. In conclusion, selling
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 variety of dishes with less
cost
 is the primary reason to throw away the
food
 and increasing the
price
 and applying additional taxes is the viable solution to reduce the wastage. I recommend
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overnment should conduct some awareness programmes educating the people about the value of
food
.
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