Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take Change the article
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in organised group activities in their free time
. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
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Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part
in organised group activities in their free time
. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
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