Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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right direction. Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take
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in organised group activities in their free
time
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. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own
opinion
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. Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take
part
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in organised group activities in their free
time
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. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own
opinion
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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