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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and development soft skill in more important Discus both views and give your opinion’

#university #education #job #hand #people #development #skill #discus #opinion’
The given data shows the
population
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lderly
population
 there from 1950 and
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 gives prediction till the year 2055. As is seen in the given diagram,
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opulation of Japan started to decline after 2005 and after 2035 it will sharply decrease. The
population
 over 65 years will be more than 40% of
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otal
population
 in the year 2055. As is shown in the bar graph, Japan’s
population
 in 1950 was only 84
million
. The
population
 kept on increasing without any exception and in 2005 it reached to over 127
million
 which was the highest
population
 in Japan. After 2005 the
population
 dropped and in 2015 it was just over 125
million
. After 20 years the
population
 will drop sharply and
finally
 in 2055 the
population
 of Japan would be only 89.9
million
 which is almost same as it was in 1950. The prediction clearly indicates that the
population
 of Japan is
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 to drop in the future. Again, the table data presents the numbers and percentages of
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lderly
population
 in Japan who are over 65 years old. As is seen, the number of
such
 older citizens in Japan was only 4.1
million
 which was less than 5% of
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otal
population
.
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 percentage reached
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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