There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

Dear Manager, I am writing you to find out
what
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how to solve the
bus
issue on the
line
39 Finch East regular
bus
and
also
on Express
bus
of the same
line
. As a regular customer on the
bus
line
39 Finch East Express towards Nelson/Morninglane direction, I have noticed some irregularities on
this
line
.
Usually
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I do take the Express
bus
at the same
bus
stop and
also
at the same time, which is Finch and Don
Mils
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Mills
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. The fastest one does not stop at the mentioned
bus
stop
any more
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and I think in
last
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the last
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two to three weeks I realized that you eliminate the regular
bus
frequency too. I know that
here
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are summer holidays that schedule might have change
because
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less
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students and
also
more people on the vacation. But I do check your app to help me organise my transport time and the buses
dont
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don't
show up as are indicated on the schedules.
Which
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makes me
as
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a
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unreliable person at the workplace, because
bus
delays are causing my late arrival to work and how to explain to my boss pretty often what is going on. I would like to write a suggestion that you might have considered
to join
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the
bus
stops together at the same side as you did for
opposite
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direction, that both buses regular and express will give
more
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smoother option to
customer
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the customer
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or add more buses on the route of the
bus
. Hope
this
will
be solve
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in satisfaction for both sides. Sincerely R.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adhering to schedules
  • inconvenience
  • daily routine
  • punctuality
  • frequency during peak hours
  • overcrowding
  • commuters
  • update system
  • reliable
  • maintenance
  • breakdowns
  • irregular bus timings
  • passengers
  • delays
  • unreliable
  • appointments
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