Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better to encourage them to spend more time outside playing sports and games.
Nowadays,the world has changed dramatically.There are many alternative activities for children to select.Most teenagers usually have freedom for playing electronic device
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main reason is it can enhance adolescent ability.When they know that there are many events such
as grouping with others.Then
they will enjoy and productive for having a new community.Moreover
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,another main reason is healthy.This
is because people will gain vitamin from the sun.Then
it can improve their antibodies.In addition
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, my friend always swimming in the morning.Then
her body accustoms to the sun so she seldom has a health problem.
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