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Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to have a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that pursuing a
job
 is likely to obtain more career fulfilment than occasionally switching jobs. Personally, I think both
job
-hoppers and long-term employees have their own advantages leading to
job
 satisfaction,
therefore
, I do not agree with the statement. Changing jobs can produce new and different ways of career satisfaction.
First
,
job
-hoppers tend to have higher productivity than others. In fact, the experience accumulated when working in various environments, meeting a lot of clients and colleagues would help
job
-hoppers to tackle problems and find out solutions faster for current difficulties at
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urrent workspace.
Thus
, they can climb up the career ladder by using knowledge from previous positions.
Second
, a
job
-hopper can be employed by big companies because of their wide partnership network.
For example
, advertising or marketing agency always need an employee with a long list of acquaintances, or potential customers which would contribute sales figures and earnings, the company would share their profits with the staff who was a
job
-hopper.
On the other hand
,
being
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 committed to one
job
 could traditionally generate satisfaction for workers. By showing their loyalty and enjoyment of work, employees can achieve merits from
job
 prospects, which often pay rises,
job
 promotions and in some countries, they get tax reductions, in the long run, they could receive annual bonuses, or even a generous pension fund. In
this
 way, spending a long period of time to work in an organization appears a lot of benefits. In conclusion, I disagree with the thought that long-term workers get more
job
 fulfilment than
job
-hoppers because both types of employees have their own strengths.
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