It is not wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workers with new and young yet inexperienced individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that each
crime
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must have a set
punishment
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irrespective of the reasons for committing it. While many people think that criminals are made not born and
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the factors influencing
crime
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should be taken into account, I believe there must be a fixed treatment for different varieties of the
crime
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. In
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essay, I would discuss both the views and assert my points.
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with, the number of criminals is increasing day-to-day due to unemployment, poverty, social injustice etc,
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,
this
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does not guarantee someone to do crimes.
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, stealing a slice of bread or a 24-carat gold necklace should be treated equally.
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, there was a viral clip on social media where a school student steals chocolates from a shop regularly caught by the shopkeeper and beat him. The netizens exploded for
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treatment, and I too would not support
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,
however
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,
this
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child pleaded that it is just chocolate and to let him go free. These small stealings without
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would make him a proper criminal,
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everyone should know the
punishment
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for theft in the same.
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, various external factors
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as poverty, joblessness, adultery may influence a person to commit crimes, while some of these are unavoidable, there are some factors which one oneself’s creates and indulge in committing it.
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, proper criminal may find many loop-holes if these factors are taken into consideration.
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, a man murders his wife and justifies it by saying she slept with someone else. I think proper trails should be done, no biased judgement in cases and perhaps crimes can be categorized in groups. To conclude, people should be aware of the
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they are getting from the law if they do a particular
crime
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irrespective of factors influencing in committing it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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