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It is not wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workers with new and young yet inexperienced individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that each
crime
 must have a set
punishment
 irrespective of the reasons for committing it. While many people think that criminals are made not born and
hence
 the factors influencing
crime
 should be taken into account, I believe there must be a fixed treatment for different varieties of the
crime
. In
this
 essay, I would discuss both the views and assert my points.
To begin
 with, the number of criminals is increasing day-to-day due to unemployment, poverty, social injustice etc,
however
,
this
 does not guarantee someone to do crimes.
Moreover
, stealing a slice of bread or a 24-carat gold necklace should be treated equally.
For instance
, there was a viral clip on social media where a school student steals chocolates from a shop regularly caught by the shopkeeper and beat him. The netizens exploded for
this
 treatment, and I too would not support
this
,
however
,
this
 child pleaded that it is just chocolate and to let him go free. These small stealings without
punishment
 would make him a proper criminal,
therefore
 everyone should know the
punishment
 for theft in the same.
On the other hand
, various external factors
such
 as poverty, joblessness, adultery may influence a person to commit crimes, while some of these are unavoidable, there are some factors which one oneself’s creates and indulge in committing it.
Also
, proper criminal may find many loop-holes if these factors are taken into consideration.
For example
, a man murders his wife and justifies it by saying she slept with someone else. I think proper trails should be done, no biased judgement in cases and perhaps crimes can be categorized in groups. To conclude, people should be aware of the
punishment
 they are getting from the law if they do a particular
crime
 irrespective of factors influencing in committing it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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