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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antartic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places.

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Nowadays, tourism has been taken to another level. People can now see with their own eyes, places that not too long ago was only possible to be seen on the screens. Tourists have found their way to visit areas with hard climatic conditions,
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 as deserts and the North Pole. In the following essay, I will be sharing some benefits and disadvantages for both the environment and the sightseer regarding these new possibilities. On the one hand, expeditions to unhabitable areas can be extremely beneficial. Seeing with our own eyes how wildlife functions on its perfect balance, without being touched by human hands, can be an exceptional experience. I had a chance to watch a documentary about a man that was a pioneer entering into the jungle decades ago. He described how amazing it was, to meet animals that are now extinct.
Furthermore
, to watch the raw environment in
such
 a close view can be helpful for mother nature. Having the opportunity to feel the climate changes outside the headlines can be an eye-opening experience. At the same time, we have to be extra careful to not disturb, the ecological balance.
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, I heard a history of a
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 that visited the Antarctic
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 and noticed that the thaw on ice caps was leading to the deaf of many native mammals.
Therefore
, she made a post about it on Instagram, and she drove the publics' attention to that matter. After a month, Greenpeace volunteers were there to try to find a solution to that problem.
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, visiting those places can represent a threat to
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ourist's life. Taking into account, that those surroundings were not supposed to have a human stopover. Regulations about your safety do not exist.
Therefore
, visitants must be aware of the hazards. Indeed, it is required for tourists to sign a sheet regarding they are aware of it. To conclude, discover untouched places it is an adventure. Even though it has its drawbacks, it can
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 be beneficial for both the visitor and the environment.
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