Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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due to
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health
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why, Linking Words
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government
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budget Correct article usage
the health
for
preventive measures. Change preposition
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To begin
with, it is evident that, in most of the country's Linking Words
health
education is hardly imparted among the Use synonyms
people
. When Use synonyms
people
are made aware Use synonyms
about
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of
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health
-related issues it naturally implies prevention of umpteen Use synonyms
diseases
which can be avoided with basic alterations in lifestyles. Use synonyms
For example
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of
developing countries, Change preposition
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people
are suffering from so many communicable Use synonyms
disease
because they do not know about Change to a plural noun
diseases
disadvantages
of having unhygienic food and water. Correct article usage
the disadvantages
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government
can provide Use synonyms
the
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basic
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then
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of various Correct article usage
the spread
diseases
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hence
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this
would improve the Linking Words
overall
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health
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people
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Also
, another major reason is creating awareness would definitely consume less funds of the Linking Words
government
and would have more positive impacts. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, it should Linking Words
also
be remembered that not all examples of modern disease are preventable or predictable, and it is critical to maintain research into cures for all Linking Words
diseases
. Use synonyms
Hence
certain Linking Words
amount
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health
budget should be diverted in curing Use synonyms
diseases
as well. Use synonyms
For example
, Linking Words
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life-threatening
diseases
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such
as cancer cannot be prevented with basic measures and Linking Words
hence
there should be funds allocated to the cure and research of Linking Words
such
gruesome Linking Words
diseases
. Use synonyms
To conclude
, it can be said that, the Linking Words
government
should spend Use synonyms
sufficient
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amount
of money on treatment too, but Use synonyms
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proportion of Add an article
a high
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amount
should be spent on Correct article usage
the amount
health
education and preventive measures so that the population of the country can live in a healthy environment with less price.Use synonyms
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