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Some TV programmes, video of violent games and other leisure activities are harmful on children. How harmful they are? What can be done to solve these problem?

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Some people think that children are affected by violent
TV
 programmes, games and other leisure activities. In
this
 essay, I will discuss how they influence children and the solution to
this
 issue. In the wake of the advancing technology, children can more easily to exposure media, They can through mobile phone,
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 pad or television to watch some
TV
 programmes, games or other leisure activities relating to programmes which contain violence.
This
 can harmful to the children because they are too young and do not have
d
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iscernment to know what is right or wrong.
Thus
, if they always play games or watch
TV
 programmes which
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 included violence, they might grow to have
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iolent personality trait. In the long run, it might cause many violent problems in society.
Although
 it makes
this
 problem.
However
, It can be solved with some solutions.
For example
, parents can limit their children to watch
this
 kind of game video and they can explain
this
 is the wrong things if they do it.
This
 makes children learn from a bad example to distinguish the right things.
In addition
, the government should forbid those programmes to show on the family viewing hour
instead
 of the show on the mid-night time.
This
 can reduce the chance of children to exposure
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those kinds of shows. In conclusion,
although
 violent
TV
 programmes, game video or activities can be harmful to children because they do not have the discernment to understand which is good or bad.
However
, it can be solved by the government to ban these kinds of
TV
 shows to be seen in the family viewing time and parents can limit their children watching games video and educate them to define right and wrong.
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