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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration for many. Others, however, prefer different other aspects of a job over the salary they earn. In your opinion what are the most important aspects of a job?

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Everyone's dream in their life, they want to obtain an immediate job offer after the completion of graduation. Most people need a job because they want to accomplish their wishes in all the aspects. In
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, the most significant criteria is that money, it rules and commands the human's life. Job is an essential factor for the middle class and low-class families.
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, they have expectations of salary, because they have not held any financial savings,
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 they will depend on it.
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, Those people have been planning since childhood, to lead a wealthy life for the future.
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, Drivers have not had any educational background but they anticipate their children to join in a Multi-national Company with high salary once they complete the schooling .
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, They have not earned adequate fund to support their school fees, even though they try to borrow a loan from Banks or friends to achieve the goals.
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, Another group of people expect to get a reputed position in the community because those people come from high-class family. They do not consider the salary package, those parents already well settled and have done financial savings for children.
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, Doctor's or engineer's children must be followed their occupation to derive respect. In conclusion, Salary or Reputable position, it might be depending upon their situation whichever it suits for them. According to me, I need to acquire a reasonable position along with a good package because both give respect in the organization.
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