In order to imporove the quality of education, high school students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticise their teachers, but other think it will result in loss of respect and discipline in classroom. What your opinion ?

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Education
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is believed to be an important aspect
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a child's overall development. Schools are the primary institutions in laying the foundation of
education
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following by colleges or university which introduces the people to intricacies of the
education
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field.
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reason for people to pursue the
school
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and
college
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level
education
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is to
be make
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a high yielding
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. Now the ways to achieve
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dream are different for people, some feel like
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ollege
education
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is very much necessary in building a successful
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while other believe that high
school
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education
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ins enough to get an employment. A widely followed pattern across the world is to
enroll
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for a
college
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degree
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after high
school
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graduation. The in-depth knowledge and expertise gained through
college
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education
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can never be included in a high
school
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curriculum. The percentage of people pursuing
college
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degrees has increased drastically in the
last
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couple of decades. Some studies suggest that 1 in every 10 students worldwide is planning to go for a higher
degree
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to increase the probability of having a successful
career
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. Another popular contrasting belief is to get a job as soon as
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high
school
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education
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is completed. These people feel that time and monetary resources spent on getting a
college
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degree
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should be simply avoided and
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the same time should be spent earning money. Why wait for 3 years to start earning when you can start it right after high
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, is what these people advocate. Even if the
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viewpoints have different approaches to make a profitable
career
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one thing is common between the two, which is
Education
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. So if
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solely holds
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a magnitude of importance in one's
career
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why not attain a
college
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degree
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and take the
first
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and primal step towards a great
career
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