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In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters and writers. What can arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot?

In
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world
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 where scientific and technological advances dominate, people working in the field of
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 as musicians, painters and writers still gain a great deal of attention.
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arts
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the arts
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 can teach us certain
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 about life that we cannot learn from science and technology.
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,
arts
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 give us the opportunity to see
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 from a different perspective. In the
world
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 of science and technology, we see
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 as the way they are; yet, in the
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 of
arts
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, we are allowed to use our imagination and creativity to see
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 in the way we want. In a researcher’s eyes,
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, a cat is just an animal with soft fur and four legs;
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, a cat, to a writer, could be a friend, a hero or a traditional symbol of a culture.
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 helps us to gain deeper insights into the
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 we live in and teaches us to think from different perspectives when encountering problems. Another point about the benefits of
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 is that
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arts
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instill
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 religious and spiritual values into each individual, which helps us to become a more well-rounded person.
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, whenever I
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 down and depressed, I often listen to the song called You
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 which always gives me the feeling that I can do anything that I have a passion for as long as I put my heart into it. I think we hardly ever have
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scientific research or a technological project. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I believe that in the
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 of
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arts
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 we can learn various
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 that are absent from the
world
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 of science and technology.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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