Some people argue that arts, such as paintings and music, are a waste of money and the government should spend this money on other public services. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.?
Nowadays in Brazil, the Culture Ministry has a lot of public capital reserved
by
Change preposition
for
arts
. Many Correct article usage
the arts
people
defend that this
money
should be used for another important area. On
my point of view, I totally agree that these funds can be applied in a better way.
Change preposition
In
To begin
with, the Health sector should always be prioritized. Firstly
, several persons
are waiting for their exams or Replace the word
people
having
a health problem. Wrong verb form
have
Secondly
, many hospitals complain of
the lack of medical doctors to attend Change preposition
about
people
who need help. Change preposition
to people
This
affects negatively the life
of these Fix the agreement mistake
lives
people
who can not move forward with their lives. For example
, one father has to work to earn some money
. However
, if this
person is sick, he will not be able to start a job. So the government must assist that person with the necessary resources.
Furthermore
, the reserved money
should be used to improve the economy
. Spending these funds to enabling
a better Wrong verb form
enable
economy
is crucial to raise the country itself. Making strong relations with key companies is quite essential to build a hard economy
. For instance
, the government inject money
to create several jobs for their population also
Correct word choice
and also
allow
Correct subject-verb agreement
allows
the
private organizations Correct article usage
apply
investing
in the country. Change the verb form
to invest
Consequently
, people
will able
to Add a missing verb
be able
moving
the Change the form of the verb
move
economy
, bringing more resources for
their nation. Change preposition
to
Likewise
, buying a new house or a new car.
To conclude
, the Government must always prioritize some sectors than
others. The Arts Ministry has to be put on a second plan in comparison with Change preposition
over
essentials
sectors, Change the noun form
essential
such
as Health and Economy
. Correct article usage
the Economy
Therefore
, these areas have a vital place in any nation
structure.Replace the word
national
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