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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The bar chart illustrates how often people living in the USA were eating junk
food
 restaurants in 2003, 2006 and 2013. Overall, in the USA, people were eating fast
food
 mostly once a week or once or twice a month, whereas few of them did every day and never. It is clear that the majority of people in the USA were eating fast
food
 once a week during the three periods. In 2003, roughly 31% of people ate fast
food
 once a week. After three years,
this
 figure rose
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slightly
 around 2%.
However
, in 2013,
this
 number decreased to 27%. The percentage of people eating fast
food
 from restaurants once or twice a month was at 30% in 2003.
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,
although
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 figure decreased in 2006 to 25%,
then
, in 2013, it increased and seated at 33% approximately. The higher percentage of people eating fast
food
 every day was witnessed in 2003, with almost 5%.
Then
, in 2006,
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 number
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 slightly to 3% and it remained the same in 2013.
Similarly
, people who never ate fast
food
 was 5% in 2003 and under 5% both in 2006 and 2013.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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