Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage

There is a fact that companies that operate across many countries are driving small-sized enterprises out of the marketplace.

Although

the trend has been recording several drawbacks, I am supposed that the positive effects outweigh the negative ones

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First

of all, it is the replacement of multinational companies that

benefits

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customers in terms of price.

In other words

, multinational enterprises have competitive advantages in terms of assets, facilities and supply chain in comparisons with small businesses. They can produce massively products thanks to extensive factories and technological innovations and

then

launch their merchandise at much lower prices than local businesses. Those who make a purchase of the products not only benefit lower cost but

also

much higher quality.The toothpaste product of Unilever,

for instance

, costs three times as cheaper as most Vietnamese ones.

Secondly

, the emergence of foreign companies may generate

a great deal of

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job opportunities for low-qualified

laborers

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, which makes contribution raise the living condition of people. After Samsung corporation set a manufacturing site in Thai Nguyen province, the living standard of the population considerably grows.

However

, In general, the situation has an

unfavorable

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impact on the diversity of domestic products. Indeed, while cross-national companies produce some of their brands, a lot of local brands provide different types of products. When local vendors no longer exist, domestic customers are forced to purchase limited products.

Furthermore

, the spread of multinational companies may lead to several environmental-related issues in terms of air pollution. Most of them release dirty sewer and toxic gases into

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an

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nvironment which is the main cause of air contamination In conclusion,

although

the development of multinational companies in

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omestic market results in air pollution and the loss of variety

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products, the trend is advantageous due to lower cost and the enhancement of dweller lives