Some educationalists agrue that non-exam,atr-based subjects, such as music,drama,art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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professionals claim that school subjects which students do not pass as an exam

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as art , music and so on , must be included in the secondary school in order to enhance academic accomplishments.

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agree that non-exam subjects should be taken into account at middle schools because it has

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assive impact on our spiritual

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and expression of children’s feelings and thoughts as well. On the one hand, the art subjects contain lots of opportunities so that it is really beneficial for children in some way because Children tend to be more creative and independent at

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emonstration of their mindset ,whereas elder population are not able to convey themselves effortlessly.

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oung generation can easily figure out new hobbies or future occupation that will be likely the most favourite activity ever.

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, my younger brother found out the best hobby for him through art-based subject

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year. He has been keen on creating almost masterpiece so-called curving sculpture and

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have never thought that he would seek any sense at that. Actually,

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implement these subjects in the curricular of secondary-school.

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, some children would think

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useless and unnecessary to participate in these classes because of irrelevance in future. By that

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mean , it will be challenging in terms of getting

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and job as well. Everybody knows all universities that related to art-working , are extremely demanding and competitive . You should be really talented or gifted to get into but

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not guaranteed you will be even accepted.

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is a really big problem for children who want to devote themselves

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field.

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might provide and change the aspects of abilities to get into each

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or to give a chance students. To conclude , though

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agree that subjects which related to art should be in secondary school because it plays a huge role in children’s minds.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

335 words

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Some educationalists agrue that non-exam,atr-based subjects, such as music,drama,art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Humans have made a great technological process in the last hundred years. However, this progress has negative effects on people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Your next-door neighbour owns a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night. Write a letter to your neighbour requesting that something be done about the dog. Include in your letter: your reason for writing what you would like to happen a nice, respectful style

children who are brought up in families that do not have large amount of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brough up by wealthy parents. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?