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Traffic and Housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since the world’s population grows at a gradual speed annually, housing and transporting issues have
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 reached its peak. Discussions have been made between experts to seek possible solutions for those problems, and one of them is to move large corporations and their staffs to the rural areas. While critics consider
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 idea cannot make a resolution in household and traffic fields. Not surprisingly, the expenditure for
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ransferring process would be a wasteful bundle of money.
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 spending will definitely be unaffordable for the majority of businesses, and even for the minority which may afford it, none of them would pay for
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the national budget in the relocating process for these companies.
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 seems to be impossible and irrational since the state budget is limited, while other priorities are in need of investment which comes from the government. Another striking reason which makes me believe the mentioned solution may not deal with problems is that when businesses’ offices experienced relocation, their employees
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 have to move. Starting a new life in the rural area means that staffs must pay for their travelling fee, a new house and of course no one would follow that unconditionally.
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, housing and traffic demands will be levelled up significantly because of the growth in these areas’ population, which strengthen my belief that both of these issues might not be solved. In conclusion, I restate that transferring companies to countrysides is not an ideal solution to tackle housing and traffic problems.
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