Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

Nowadays, technology becomes
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part of everyone's life. To use these technologies advertising plays
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vital role in the high sale for the products even though there is no need to buy. I partially agree with buying things randomly without any use.
To begin
with, Online shopping is the most significant reason of buying the things without thinking about its necessity because everyone uses the mobile phones and there are numerous advertisements going on in every social media platform which triggers the buyers to buy the products. Along with that people gets coupon codes and discounts if they prefer to do shopping online
this
strategy makes them more tempting to end up buying useless things.
On the other hand
, some people prefer to oversee their budget before spending
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things which actually are their basic requirements.
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re available where people actually track their expenditure and analyse it where they
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up spending too much, so technology has its pros and cons.
Moreover
, saving is
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eally good option for some people and helpful in their bad times in future if they will need urgent
money
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, even though these running advertisements are tempting but spend more or to save
money
is the individual choice. I prefer to save
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buying
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things even though they are not useful.
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  • consumer behavior
  • perceived need
  • lifestyle aspirations
  • brand image
  • prestige
  • psychological techniques
  • scarcity
  • social proof
  • celebrity endorsements
  • technological advancements
  • product innovations
  • emerging consumer needs
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